OMG, It is a sad story! And so talented written! The beginning with Heron and ending with a reminder of Heron is an excellent literary device. An unexpected ending with a woman is very intriguing.
Thanks so much for this wonderful 1912 story I am so sad about mybest friend Rosie of 65 years who is waiting in an unknown location to be buried with her husband at t Arlington National Cemetery.
a phenomenal story, i just loved this one. You switched from first to third person in the middle there, which wondered about, but i was okay with it. Love all the men showing up in the end and then that final moment is fabulous.
Yes indeed I did. I wondered about the switch too MG. There was a longer stretch of that at first and I went over it and cleared some of it out. Then at some point I said, you know what, I don't mind this. I don't know what it means, if anything, but I'm going to leave it and see what happens. So far the sky has not fallen.
Tod, I'm always astonished at your language. "He wanted to look outside at living things past the forlorn of the house but now he thought he’d rather of stayed with her. " It's so right, so natural, and fitting to the piece. And the turns from first to third to first person, as Mary noted, and the finale... It's all a marvel to me. You (and one) can do anything!
OMG, It is a sad story! And so talented written! The beginning with Heron and ending with a reminder of Heron is an excellent literary device. An unexpected ending with a woman is very intriguing.
Dear Ruth Sterling, thank you very much for noticing and liking my comment on Tod Cheney‘s story, Window III. I really loved it.
Thanks so much for this wonderful 1912 story I am so sad about mybest friend Rosie of 65 years who is waiting in an unknown location to be buried with her husband at t Arlington National Cemetery.
Thank you Gloria. I hope your friend Rosie will join her husband soon.
Rich story-telling, Tod. The use of the copper washer is very fine. Objective correlative at A level!
Thanks Mike. I had to look up objective correlative. Guess I didn't know what I was doing.
a phenomenal story, i just loved this one. You switched from first to third person in the middle there, which wondered about, but i was okay with it. Love all the men showing up in the end and then that final moment is fabulous.
Yes indeed I did. I wondered about the switch too MG. There was a longer stretch of that at first and I went over it and cleared some of it out. Then at some point I said, you know what, I don't mind this. I don't know what it means, if anything, but I'm going to leave it and see what happens. So far the sky has not fallen.
"That thing about making sense of the past in terms of the present is so hopeless I might as well try to count the stars."
Stars! Yes, I can see the stars. You've said so much through the window it will take me days to sort through these words.
Tod, I'm always astonished at your language. "He wanted to look outside at living things past the forlorn of the house but now he thought he’d rather of stayed with her. " It's so right, so natural, and fitting to the piece. And the turns from first to third to first person, as Mary noted, and the finale... It's all a marvel to me. You (and one) can do anything!
Well thanks Kevin. These are the sorts of things that make writing fun and something to look forward to.
Beautiful story, Tod, just beautiful.
Thank you Mark with a K.